Monday 30 September 2013
For
today’s lecture, we had a Development & pitch day session.
The whole
idea of this was, as a table or group, you discuss your ideas for the story you’ve
created called “The Meeting” in order to give and receive feedback about how
you could improve your story to then later adapt into a screenplay.
The idea
that I had chosen and pitched to both the groups I was in received really good
feedback. When I explained the summary of my story, I received good advice on
how I could improve my expanded pitch, which also helped me to improve the
reason as to how my characters where meeting. Where I was pretty sure that I
had a solid story before I had the group discussions, the groups helped me to
further improve the story that I had created by adding an established set up
into my story brief, because, the original story brief I wrote did not give
reason to my set-up (how my characters had gotten in
contact)
(this was my original idea i came to the lecture with, what pitched and gotten feedback on)
The set
up idea my group had given me, was, to have my main character Julius contact
Toru by email in the opening scene, doing this would help the audience to
establish a reason to why Julius is walking through Chatham town center to meet
Toru. Further expanding upon this set up, the audience would be able to
establish the time and date for the meet and also the set location, plus a
short explanation as to why Julius is messaging Toru, thus creating more build
up around the meeting of these two characters.
Here is a
fact sheet that we had to fill out, it’s also a summary of what I had created
at the end of today’s Pitch & development session
At the end
of today’s pitch and development lab session, we pitched our ideas for “The
Meeting” to our unit lecturer Simon. The feedback I received was, he
understood that it’s a story about someone trying to find them-self, however,
because I didn’t narrow it down in my original pitch (in speech marks below) as to what the newfound
abilities of Julius was, I could leave the audience open to think about
anything, i.e. even though its about super powers, It could be turned from a
super power movie to a normal everyday situation. So based off of this feedback I amended my pitch to focus on
what it is Julius specifically wants answer for so that the audience is able to
establish straight away what type of story this is.
Original pitch idea
“Demanding answers for his newfound ability,
Julius finds himself in over his head as the truth is slowly revealed about his
cursed inner secret.”
